During the holiday I went to the beach on a bus. When we got there I put on my swimming clothes so I can go to swim. The water was cold and I was on a board. I was learning how to swim. Me and my church and family went far where the people are fishing. I saw crabs under the water and my Auntie asked if she can use my board.I said yes. After that I went to my auntie and played with her.I splashed the water at her.She make me cold because she pushed me in the water, so I went to my mum and get my clothes. I went to the girls toilet and change.Then I saw Folau going back in the water with Taniela. After that I went to eat because I was hungry. I eat shapes,and grapes.Mum said that the bus will be here. We had to go back to Dunkirk because my family and my church car was there.It was a long ride.In the bus,I was cold and my cousin was playing songs and it make me go to sleep. When we got there I played tag with my cousins. It was my best day at the beach with my family and church.
Malo lele Akesa,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have added descriptive language in your writing. I also like the way you explained your emotions about how you felt. Have you made any writings about the beach?