Low Tides
I walk beside you
Across mudflats in
My blue gumboots,
Over cracking oyster
Shells, green ribbed-pipi, The traces of waving birds.
When the tide is out, what lies exposed:
River threads of mud, old brown stones,
Tiny mussels to grow;
My sole prints left
On the ocean’s
On the ocean’s
Bones.
By: Sarah Penuwarden
By: Sarah Penuwarden
Kia Ora Akesa, my name is Keila and I am a year 8 student here at Tautoro school. I really enjoyed reading this poem about low tides!. I thought that the rhyming sounded awesome!. I appresiate reading your work Akesa. Keep it up!. From Keila.
ReplyDeleteKia ora my name is Angelina and I go to Grey Main School. Your post reminds me of when I walked along the beach at low tide but it is rocky at my beach in Greymouth. I love playing in the water there. Once me and my family went body boarding at the beach I came in on a big wave and fell of my board then I scraped my leg.
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ReplyDeleteI'm Ayesha from Grey Main School in the Mamaku Hub. I really like how detailed your poem is and it sounds great. This reminds me of when I go to a beach in the weekend (I nearly go to the beach every weekend). How long did it take for you to write this poem and what inspired you to write it? From Ayesha
Hi I'm Hannah and I go to Saint Patrick's school in Greymouth, I really like the descriptive words you put into your work and the topic you chose. Maybe next time you could put what inspired you to write that poem because it would be very interesting to hear. from Hannah
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ReplyDeleteI'm Briea from Greymain School in Greymouth in Mamaku Hub .
I really like your poem . It sounds great . This reminds me of the
time I took my dogs for a walk . How long did it take you to write ? the poem ?
From : Briea
Hi Akesa,
ReplyDeleteI am a year 6 student currently attending St Pius X. Maybe you would like to check out my Blogspot: http://spxaaliyaht.blogspot.co.nz/
Anyways, I really enjoyed reading your poem about Low Tides. I really liked how you added a picture to set the scene.
Keep up the Great Work!